THIS WAS A NICE PIECE
REALLY DREW A PICTURE IN MY HEAD, I SAW THE WHOLE THING HAPPENING
AND IT WAS ALSO FUNNY AT TIMES
your talent is visible here b/c it combined aspects that let the reader understand/relate, the style not be complex, and the rhyme wasn't elementary, when i look some people can't do this
nice read
keep elevatin
keep writin
~Sage~

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Poetry
Don't Look Into My Eyes Forgotten
Understanding Once Again
"It requires wisdom to understand wisdom:
the music is nothing if the audience is deaf."