this piece was nice
i liked the twist at the end, i didnt see it comin
the rhyme was weak and like 3 times it felt forced, but the piece read like it was comin from your mind, like i was listenin to your thoughts so it didnt matter much
i enjoyed this piece
sorry to see it only had 3 replies
keep elevatin
keep writin
~Sage~

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Poetry
Don't Look Into My Eyes Forgotten
Understanding Once Again
"It requires wisdom to understand wisdom:
the music is nothing if the audience is deaf."