This was really nice
i liked how you incorporated the "plunge" and then "reaching the surface" part, it brought the piece alive
i've heard similar accounts of this story told before, but you brought it different
you gave this topic used sort of alot, a more original, more creative vibe, your style and talent brought this piece up alot,
this was a nice read
no problems with this one
keep writin hun

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Poetry
Don't Look Into My Eyes Forgotten
Understanding Once Again
"It requires wisdom to understand wisdom:
the music is nothing if the audience is deaf."