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IP:
This was pretty tight i liked the flow of this piece and your vocab was also a good thing you had going on, Here are some lines i liked from your verse..
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Im the depiction, of a soul grown wishen
Mind filled with hate, pictures of the light are skippen
Fingers itchen, Stains of blood forever sticken
In the children, our futures darkest corners
No more supporters, food grown shorter
Pain not relieved, but turned into more torture
Luck has no copy, it continues to be more sloppy
Don’t depend on it, or the road will go rocky
Let’s start a formation, Allie into one nation
Show that there’s no diffrents, all on the same station
Now problems belong to everyone, no one secluded
Your family can feel safe, we would all be included
Were all students, and there is only one teacher
That is god, so allow him to be the only speaker
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Nice..
Keep it coming 1.. |