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Feelin this mayn... nice wordplay an i like the imagery...
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take a vacation on the relationship that we assembled
ive heard the saying that love hurts but even jack wasnt that nimble
my heart explodes spontaneously like pimples on the expressions of kids
in time i may be able to forgive but ill never forget what you did
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Really liked the way u mixed brutal honesty in that line bout pimples... thas wot i mean bout imagery.
I would jus give one small criticism an thas with regards to the structure... it was a lil hard to read at first so i re-read it... other than that it was hott son.
Ps: Go an tryout in Lyrical Soldiers...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/for...?s=&forumid=199
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