not bad from either

whitel...your flow was really poor in places...
u need to make sure what ur sayin rhymes properly cos it let your piece down...uve done it before as well
but i liked the theme of your verse..decent original angle
but the content didnt really grip me thruout which a story ought to do


madawg..flow was decent....although got a bit confusing in places as did your sentences...the first verse and second were abit confusing the way you worded the lines
however the story kept me interested and seemed to get better as i read it...u ended it well too.boith of u did infact


therefore i gotta say i think madawg won this