I think cam said it all in just his one reply. the fact that u kept using the word gat over and over again in ur piece kinda aggravted me it keeps the piece way to simple try to mix things up a bit with different words not juss the same thing over again. ur flow was bad and structure could use some work along with your rhyme scheme. that's all I got to say really. juss take cam's advice on all the bad points here and juss work on those. peace.

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