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Old 11-22-03, 10:39 PM   #13
Dek81
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liked the chorus. flowed smooth

nice vocab fo sure. liked the historical refrences, u definately got intellect.

only critisism is that almost every line seemed to have sumthing to the effect of: 'i'm like this, my skill is like this, etc.' maybe throw in a line here n there that is pure set-up for the punch. just cus its a long read n the lines r less effective if it seems repititios.

nice work thou. pc
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