very nice......


flow- ok...this was well structured and complex...hearing this in audio would be a mission....a slow beat should do it...but it would settle me down quite a bit....luckily...story and lyrics pick it up dramatically

concept-nice...loved this shit really...how u jumped into the storytelling was very good...clear images were presented when i read this shit...the whole shoe topic was sweetlike...liked it a lot

lyrically-very complex...nice use of vocab...didnt get too complex either..it all followed suit and came out proper...there were a couple of lines that had me like..eh...and some that had me like..damn...good shit though

overall this was one of the best pieces i've read...almost all of it was straight and sweet...peace

yo..can u please critique my open mic in my sig?????
i need lengthy feedback from vets so i can improve....thanx...late