hmmm...

flow-i disagree with people saying the bars are stretched...thats how i write and my shit flows great in my head...only u can know how to flow with it....people read and dont flow..whatever...throw in some more multi's but dont make em too complicated or basic....seems like u used some here just too enhance the vocab......

concept- eh....aight....i guess....if there's shit i didnt catch tell me...but i couldnt put the wholle piece together as a whole....just me though....

lyrically- aight...coulda been more creative with imagery and multis....it was nice with complexity though....keep it up

overall i give it like a 6 outta 10...for now...

can u please reply with ^^lengthy critique to my open mic ..check the sig...thanx...