This was good. Lil weird, but good. The structure could have been a lil better, instead of it bein one big paragraph. The flow was a lil off cause of that. Font's a lil big, but its ok. Kinda pops out at ya. Good imagery. U got ur point across and thats all that matters. U put some emotion in it and i felt it. Good job overall. I liked it. Much respect. Keep droppin.