IGHT....ILL BREAK IT 4 YA

FLOW....8/10 LIKED UR FLOW...COULD HAVE UP'D IN A FEW SPOTS BUT OVERALL GOOD...

structure..was jus fine..

WORDPLAY...made this piece a lot better i think...can improve..but its good...

topic....4 ur first open mic was original...so propz there..

VOCAB...was good ...glad u didnt push it 2 the "WAT THE FUCK HE TRYIN 2 SAY" point...i hate that throws a piece...

OVERALL..like ya said u have improvements..here and there....mabe up ur intensity......but all 2gether..a well put piece...well writtin....

GOOD LOOKIN PIECE...

SPECIALLY 4 THE 1ST...

PROPZ

U KEEP WRITIN

ILL KEEP READIN AND FEEDIN 4 YA KID...

PEACE

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