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Old 11-25-03, 08:01 PM   #4
bouncedoggydog
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Structure was a bit uneven, not enough to disrupt the flow, but enough to be noticed. I'm not sure, you might have done this for reasons. I enjoyed reading this one, but for some reason i wanted to read more. Ryhme scheme was simple, could have used some twist and such. Topic, really nice, I wouldn't have guessed what your drop was about without reading the entire thing. Some peolpe are just too predictable, not this though. Other than the minor things I tried to point out here there is not much I would do to this. Keep them coming, it's nice to see you taking advantage fo the scriptures thread.

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