Well first, welcome to rb.com's poetry board. I hope you stay, elevate, give feedback, and make this place a community worth frequenting.

As for your poem...

Ok, the first verse caught my eye. But it made me feel this was such a conventional oh so gothier than thou peice of scheiße suicide poem. I hate that stuff. But..

...the second verse you had some real raw talent shining through on it. Seriously. I think for no other reason than it was simple and concise, and very deeply personal. I think that's what got me. Either way, nice scheiße.

~Shalom~

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Originally posted by Bruklor Nec is just dumb

I'm taking that as a compliment.