yo, i liked the structure, and the poem was pretty funny,

You’re sitting in a 2 ton explosive machine,

Looking straight out looking dead at the x mass tree

i couldnt criticize this even if i wanted to, it was a very nice drop.


aiight

plz check my poem out, it called 'thoughts'

peace

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