This piece was alright, i liked the first couple of lines, towards the end you started switching words around, sometoimes that works but it made the piece sort of confusing, and you changed rhymes schemes, that messed up the flow
but i do like the message here
keep elevatin
keep writin

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Poetry
Don't Look Into My Eyes Forgotten
Understanding Once Again
"It requires wisdom to understand wisdom:
the music is nothing if the audience is deaf."