This was deep. I felt it, for real.
It was kind of weak, i think you should upp
your vocab, and word usage. You also repeated
alot of the same ideas, and i think that took away from the
flow andpower of the piece....but i liked it
it's good to see the ways that people express themselves,
keeping it inside is defintely not the way to go
alcholic/abusive relationships can be very hard especially
if it involves a loved one, just make sure you're there
when they need you, and even if the one doing the harm is
one you hold dear also, you cant let that stop you
from stepping up and doing whats right, don't let it get out
of hand, and let her know that she doesnt need anything like that............ dont wanna start preaching in here, but i dont like shyt like that.
PM me if you ever need to talk.

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Poetry
Don't Look Into My Eyes Forgotten
Understanding Once Again
"It requires wisdom to understand wisdom:
the music is nothing if the audience is deaf."