It had potential and part of the messge was there but the poem itself was too elementary to tackle the topic you were going for.
I think you should work on spelling because it makes a difference down the road and in terms of interpretation of what is purposeful and what is not.
It started off well and I was getting into it but you lost it in the second half. The third stanza... the 'son' line didn't work because I didn't know what sense you were using the word in, the contradiction does not make sense.... and I'm aware of the tool that it can be. It did not seem like you were using it as a justaposition to the darkness and it seemed uneasy.
I also thought that your final stanza where you explained your meaning took away from the essence of it, but thats just my opinion.
keep the ideas up though and tighten up delivery.
good work.
.peace.

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