dogg, you start shit on the intahnet, cause in real life ya phoney,
y0u start " beef " cause your jus full of " balogne ",
Liked it good wordplay
y0u d0nt kn0w me, but will probably come at me with false accusations,
the time your waistin, i'm "siccer " then an aids patient,
first line too stretched 2nd played
n0 matter what happenz im alwayz g0nna be numbah 0ne,
y0u shouldn't even battle, jus make like forest gump and run
lil stretch but its all good
run forest run, run forest run, retreat!,
you stepped into this ball game but you can't take the heat
Ball game and heat don't go together both lines were wak,
in my heart i kn0w, i never evah get beat, 2 u this battle is un-pleasent
only g00d muthahfuckin " rapping " you do is on christmas presents,
1st lines a little forced 2nd wordplay so ok
y0u never bet me but yet you bet me you could serve me, y0u'z a perpatraitor,
y0u coulndn't fuckin " serve me " if y0u waz my waiter,
Again wak 1st line ok but played wordplay on tha bottom
i'm becomin even greater, y0ur just gettin badder,
hearin mah rhymez and pissin ya pants like u g0tz a problem witcha bladder
Badder? WTF thats the definition of forced 2nd ine okish
this chitter chatter on the net needz 2 stop, its ridiculous,
this guy turned gay after this battle 0uta n0whwere,
n0stradomous couln't have predicted this
Stretched first line bout chitter chatter doesn't relate

Elevation needed

Explict applyin pressure,
You bout to get out classed well beyond measure,
1st too short makes 2nd sound stretched
To infest you with pain, thats my pleasure,
I drop 2nd cause this performance is impossible to follow,
1st ok but infest you wit' pleasure? 2nd stretched
Swallow back,
Matter a fact,
Heres a gat,
Nigga swallow that,
Lame but good flow would be sound phat in audion
Leave ya ass with a hollow back,
Nice imagery
When you get hit with government issue,
Official pistols,
k
Exposing ya brain tissue
When they kiss you,
Sounds wak but k a multi
Leaving more then a hickey,
The situations bout to get bloody way beyond sticky,
Ok i suppose but your multis although present are lame
You bout to leave your draws all shitty,
Explict so focused,
I eat threw JaYDeE like a swarm of African locus,
It's fine but I eat threw ya like a swarm of African locus, woulda flowed better
Run but you can't hide, the long arm of the 3-8th a reach ya,
Disfigure ya facial feature,
Facial features but k nice to see multis
If aggravated Explict transform's into a creature,
Then you can get a glance of a beast that beat ya,
When I feast on ya flesh,
Turn your whole family a mess,
Sounds corny
Theres no escape, just ain't safe,
Explict opening ya face,
Like an unlocked safe,
Weak ass similie good multi

Explicit gets it I'm afraid technically better

Please hit this up as I spent a long time to give you both a good break down of what I think
The rules say you gotta use this rhyme scheme so copy an paste it easy!
Rhymes
Wordplay
Multis
Metas
Punches
Personals
Opener
Finisher
Enjoyment

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