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i like clicking into thread links with catchy title . . you did exactly that . . the drop went exactly with the title of the drop . . that's good! as for your chorus/hook be more creative with that . . you over used the word "baby" . . it sounded like something B2K would write . . so next time stay away from the words like baby . . na'sayin? it appeared that you had a little wordplay in there so that's good . . you had some metaphors as well . . vocabs! you need to at least show you have an intelligent mind . . use vocabs . . but don't overdose on it . . it'll only make your verse(s) just boring . . try adding multies . . it'll make it a sweet read . . na'sayin? but like the vocabs . . don't overdose on these neither . . you had a nice structure which made it an easy read . . this peice was pretty deep . . i liked it . . keep droppin . . keep elevatin . . get at me!
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