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Old 11-29-03, 08:21 PM   #3
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this was a decent drop...the topic was fallowed well and you seemed to have an idea for how to write originally with new ideas on death and shit....but some of the lines didnt flow well...and some of it just didnt rhyme at all...you discriptions of the different ways of dying could've been more vivid...but for a new kid this wasn't too bad
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