You ryhmed it well for a completely useless topic.
Vocab was good but I won't say up it coz your tellin a story and vocab aint that important.
To improve pick a topic which people will feel.
Overall 6/10

be sure to check out 'love you,hate you' when it drops....it's gon' be amazin

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