1. YOUR WORDS CARRY ALOT OF MAGNITUDE YOU CAN TELL YOUR NO STRANGER TYO THIS DESPITE YOU HAVENT WRITTEN IN A WHILE YOU CAN STILL SEE YOU MAINTAINED YOUR ABILITIES.
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3.THE SECOND PARAGRAPH UTILIZING THIRD PERSON ADDED A FLAIR TO THIS AND A NEW LEVEL OF THOUGHT.THEN SWITCHING BACK TO FIRST PERSON MAY CONFUSE SOME BUT THATS CAUSE THEY DONT GRASP YOUR WORK.......REAL GOOD DROP I WOULD GO DEEPER BUT IT WOULD BE MEANING LESS YOUR THE WRITTER YOU KNOW WHAT YOU MEANT ITS IS HOT NONE THE LESS.