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Picture the prism, interal- inner adolescence, adult depression
expressed antisocially, dressed focally the Adolf in question

wicked lines right there, maybe they should have been the opener? they really cought the attention and made me think "what the fuck does this nutbar mean?!" but in a more positive way. And as usual, the proper use of improper multies. :P

Its a steep run of the "mill", faking street on righteous paths
eyes are the window to the soul shown through the sightless mass

word, I think I wrote a run of the mill line like this. I'll see if I can dig it up for you later lol. the second line is the most quotable thing I have heard in a while.

An earpiece applicance that overhauls defiance with hate calls
whats the threat of death when living life is already so painful?
In your cushy cushy computer seat? hardly painful =)
I'm kidding, they are good lines, and I mock you because of my insecurity. I didn't understand the earpiece appliance very much, unless you meant a phone. Sound more like you're talking about a hearing aid though.

Observing the rainfall, the computer chair conquests as throne
with the hold of A Margo, enough to leave all impressed in Rome
I don't get the second line, I don't know what a Margo is. I think it was the name of a hooker on Mad Tv, but other than that, it leaves me lost. The first line makes me ejaculate though.

The words "You brought it on yourself" were finally that illusive
it was plain to see that feelings confusive were only just denial!!
you flipped the line funny....it flowed but didn't rhyme. Say what?

Hit with milestones, HERE making nothing of a tentative existence
No employement, I must be useless, in all smoothness I'm friction
I am making that my MSN name in a moment. Where do you think of this shit? It is perfectly flowing and it illustrates emotion as clearly as in possibly could, and is still abstract. I have said it before, and I will say it again. You are a jerk :P

So thee exists, Asterisk pointing to me Asterisk, Here to con time
I'd love to walk the "tight" rope once, spend some more life "online"
From day one it went down hill, I'll never get over the hill...
...Hopefully anyway, I love you void Eternally Yours,

N Demik

a beautiful ending to a superb piece, you fiend.
It seemed to trail off while remaining on the topic, but the asterisks confused me a lot. I know have a fixation on askterisks. You bastard.

Great work dood, the smiley was a nice touch.