This reminded me of this country song "Walk a little straighter daddy"... the chorus is "Walk a little straighter daddy, you're swayin side to side. Your footsteps make me dizzy and I'm strugglin to survive. I keep slipin and stumblin an (I don't know what part)" It's about an alcoholic father...
This was an emotional peice and I can definatly feel your portrayal of feelings in this. There's not a whole lot of critiquing you can do on emotions... keep ya head up an keep elevatin peace