Some people laugh like coppin on heritage is fun
When it comes to me racist ideas stop and are done
^^^nice line^^^

The piece itself was good, but could of been made better,
you need to use more vocabulary, and wordplay.

And your structure needs a little help, you kept most lines the same length, but sum were more than a few words over.

nice topic, and i liked the title, thought it was gonna be better than it was.

6/10

aiight

no hate

peace


and please check out 'breakin' by myself and white lightning.

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