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Old 12-02-03, 10:30 PM   #1
Gene Pool
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Corrupted Visions: Freedom

IP:

again another new approach at my rhyme scheme so plz read through it. I know it's kinda long but it don't take to long. leave some honest feedback of what u think. peace.

Hook:
the one and only thing everyone in this world has in common/
is the fight for freedom, for freedom, a vision that none can see/
cuz were blinded by guns, guts, and blood, stuck in an endless breeze/
live to be free, we all have our dreams, even u, includin me, dreams to be free/

Verse #1:
juss look around sometime, at your surrounding grounds/
and u’ll soon come to realize, the world of death with all the bounds/
realize the world with only ur sound, these rhymes carry out/
and u’ll soon see a world of free, with unclouded shrouds/
unclouded frowns, cuz u know why all these ppl look down/
when u live a life, with beats from your hip hop street/
u always see beef, and dead turnin up 6 feet deep/
but u’ll always ignore, till it comes knockin at yo door/
then it’s ya lil brother layin there on tha floor/
and revenge is the only door that u wanna explore/
give into the herdless hoard, and destroy the core/
of ya heart, but yo b4 ya do it, ask yaself?
Are ya fightin for freedom? Or for someone else/

Hook:
the one and only thing everyone in this world has in common/
is the fight for freedom, for freedom, a vision that none can see/
cuz were blinded by guns, guts, and blood, stuck in an endless breeze/
live to be free, we all have our dreams, even u, includin me, dreams to be free/

Verse #2:
so here u are, u got ur culprits in reach of ya arm/
24, plus one, u pump 9, straight from ya gun/
and lace all them basterds across the chest, ending their wait for death/
and u quest to catch ur breath, rest and think about what’s next/
but u gave it up, ur freedom and soon u’ll be runnin out of luck/
juss givin up? No instead u run, begin your fight for freedom son/
just lackin jump, stop for a minute and u’ll get spun for a chump/
cashed up and ya stuck, till the cops catch up, and lock u up/
so now where do u go, they got yo ass on death row/
ur freedoms broke, cash in ya chips cuz u’ll neva see home/
let alone the daylight which u wish to evoke, provoke/
yaself to demote, to a remote place where it’s in ya throat, u choke/
and end ya life on ya own, that’s freedom, when u make it alone/

Hook:
the one and only thing everyone in this world has in common/
is the fight for freedom, for freedom, a vision that none can see/
cuz were blinded by guns, guts, and blood, stuck in an endless breeze/
live to be free, we all have our dreams, even u, includin me, dreams to be free/

Verse #3:
and I do have my own dreams, to be free/
from this world of hate, greed, and disbelief/
the government which has bloodied and cleaved/
so many ppl at the knees, to strike fear in their enemies/
HELL! I juss wanna be free, from all this corruption/
and live a life, to do what I want with my time/
fuck guns, fuck knives, fuck crime, and fuck 187 and triple 6 signs/
just let me go up stage, grab a mic, and show all these ppl what it’s like/
to live in a life, free from fights, free from darkness, here I stand in light tonight/
cuz I’m free, free is what I’ll always be, just call me a bird as I fly gracefully/
cuz freedom can’t be givin, it’s gotta be gained, gained in any way/
in any way to shine through a world of disgrace, cuz that’s what freedom is/
a vision, an incision, an implantation in ya brain, gaining all my freedom and fame/
through this rap game, and it’s the way it’ll always fuckin stay, freedom is tamed/
and it’s kinda strangely deranged, on how true freedom can’t be explained/
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