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Old 12-02-03, 10:55 PM   #1
Gene Pool
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dude man post in here 3 open mics which u have replied to or your thread will be deleted.

and for a breakdown, flow was there but some of your multi's seemed a little forced and like someone already said (to lazy to check who it was) try to rhyme your transitions, u had some good wordplay and some alright vocab and some imagery but I thought your structure was kinda wack, I had to rethink my reading over a few times to get the flow goin in my head but keep elevatin bro. peace.

hit up my open mic called "Freedom" if u got the time bro. thanx in advance. peace.
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