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Old 12-03-03, 01:30 AM   #2
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But this was ok...structure needs work in this piece, make the lines a little longer and the same length so its structured better...You had some good multies in this though...vocab was ok, needs to be up'd though....your flow was pretty decent in this piece i thought, got off at points....but overall this was ok...keep at it.
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