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But this was alright i thought...your structure was pretty good, could use a little work though, try making some of your shorter lines longer to help make the lines the same length....your vocab in this was pretty good i thought, could be up'd a bit though...try adding some multies and internals to this to help out the flow....but overall this was alright...keep at it.