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But this was alright i thought.....your structure was pretty decent in this, the last verse it kinda got off on the structure, but you should still try to make the lines around the same length so its structured good....The flow in this piece was alright, try adding some multies though cause there wasnt really any in this....your chorus was alright i thought as well....but overall this was alright...keep at it.