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That was really good, the emotion and description of what was going on was really interesting, i found your vocab was really on par, the way you used it was good, This i think is one of your best works it was unique the way you brought the topic and the ending was good i liked the description of this line
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We're that on society.. With his dynasty
His life rubbed of Like the pencil..
He was temperamental.. detrimental
To his sanity.. There was no real calamity
He lived in a bloody period Like sanitrys
His blood, sweat & tears
. .Tugged his chest near
To his passionate red ink
A dead brink Leer-Rick to Lyrics
Even though he wasn't meant for it..
That was a great part in this piece the way you ended it was awesome.
Very good read keep it up
And thanks for our critique on kclipz 4 murken an myn collabo
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