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But yeah this was pretty good...your structure was alright, try to keep your lines around the same lenght though to make it structured good cause you had some shorter lines, but it was still good....your flow in this was good as well i thought, it was off at points like said before me....Vocab in this was pretty decent i though....you had some good wordplay in this....overall this was pretty good...keep at it.