Not to bad, i dident really get the topic but the flow wasent to bad

my soul is just ice though justice knows not the crevices of my heart
hold cold steel to my temple, i feel the chill my body begins to fall apart

^very nice line right there...

i think you could of worked on your ryme scheme a little and focus on one topic..but overall not to shabby

im sorry your gettin slept on, i feel ya pain

peace