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Old 12-05-03, 01:57 AM   #3
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This was alright....but you need to work on your structure a little bit though, try making your lines a little longer and the long ones short, and make them around the same length so its structured good....flow was ok, could have been better, add some multies and internals to help that out though...overall this was ok but just elevate...keep at it.
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