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But this was pretty good, a long read but it was worth it i thought...all of you had good flow i thought....some of you need to work on your structure though, lines were at all different lengths and some of you had kinda stretched out lines...mostly everyones vocab was good in this i thought....but overall this was a good piece...keep at it.