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Old 12-05-03, 07:47 AM   #3
Dev
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thought this was pretty average with a lot of room for improvement....the scheme was simple....which look away from the read.....try adding some nice multis....and some good word play...some of ya vocab was good but then you had lines that were all basically one silable words....ya structure seemed ok for the most.....so jus expand in future on this style..it will make it a much more interesting drop...aight...pZ
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