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Old 12-05-03, 02:37 PM   #2
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You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of peoples you left feedback in or this will get closed/deleted..

But this was alright....you need to work on structure though, try making your lines around the same length and shorten them a bit they are stretched out....flow was ok, try adding a few more multies, you had some but not a lot....just work on those things...overall this was alright...keep at it.
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