it was a decent read. you'll elevate a lot in time. fix up the
structure a little. the multies flowed evenly but in most cases
were a bit choppy. it was a nice verse no doubt. stayed on
topic. not a bad topic to write about either. im sure people
can relate to it. but yea. it was enjoyable to read. props.
keep it up.

please check out my new verse wen i post it up. thanx

peACE