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Old 12-05-03, 03:56 PM   #4
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This was alright i thought.....structure wise it was ok, needs fixed up in a few spots though, cause you have some longer lines and shorter lines, try keeping them around the same length to help it out....flow was ok, try adding some multies to help it out though....but overall this was alright...keep at it.
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