This was definitely an enjoyable read. Honestly when I read the title and maybe the 1st line or 2 I kind of sighed like "Oh, this concept again." Because, honestly, it has been done a lot recently in light of G.W. Bush revealing to the world how big a jackass he really is. But that doubt dropped out of my mind after reading a little further because of how thoroughly yall destroyed this topic. You 3 definitely ripped this piece to shreds.

Lethargic
2 verses with distinctly different rhyme schemes and styles, but still equally hot. That's hard to pull off but you did that shit nicely. I was actually feeling the 2nd verse just a bit more than the 1st, I don't know if it was the shorter bars or what. But the 1st was hot too.

Cam
I've only been here for a quick second, but in every piece I've read of yours, your structure is just impeccable. Despite that, your wording doesn't seem forced just to make the sentences even out length wise. You seem like you've been doing this shit for a while.

Dez
That ending was fuckin' ill. Point blank. Sick concept.

All 3
You all stuck to the topic real nicely. I didn't see anyone get sidetracked or spit filler laced bars for any extended period of time. The mental imagery you guys painted with your metaphors and similies was amazing.

As far as areas to improve, I don't see a whole lot. Leth's 1st verse and Dez's could maybe stand to have their word placement tinkered with real slightly and Cam's could maybe up the vocab just a tiny little bit. Other than that, this whole piece from all 3 was hot. Lookin' back on this feedback, it struck me that it seems like I'm dickridin', but that's definitely not the case. This piece was just hot to me. Anyways, fuck all that. Hot piece yall. Drop me some feedback.

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