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Old 12-06-03, 03:34 AM   #2
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But this was ok....your structure could a bit better though, some lines were short some were long, try to keep them around the same lenght though so it is structured good....flow in this was alright i thought, got off sometimes, add more multies in this to make it better...but overall this was alright...keep at it.
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