You're right, the structure really threw this piece off. . Made it a pain in the ass to read a paragraph. .

The content was ehhh. . No eye popping lines at all. In the beginning, it was obvious you were trying, then later on you started to talk about bling bling, and completely lost my interest.

The flow was good for the most part. . It was kind of hard to pick up on, just because the structure is so fucked, but it was cool none-the-less.

Overall, this was decent. I've seen a lot better from you, and if you keep writing, you'll elevate again.

Btw - I'm only 15.