Well I really can't give a good comment to something like this, I don't like the topic at all. I also think that before you talk about something like this, you should get your facts right about what your talking about, if your discharge is green, you need to go to the doctor....can't believe you would actually write something as disturbing as this, spreading it and everything....anyways, all your rhymes are like this i don't think alot of people want to take the time to read it, get some better material son....if you did that, I'm sure you would get some positive feedback... as for the structure of writing, it was an easy read and easy to follow.
peace