yo this was dope... your a fucking genius....

it almost never fell of flow, you lyricism was great (multies, internals, vocab), you had some pure emotional wordplay in there, and an element of storytelling... your hook fits in perfectly, and sounds great when reading out loud... some of my fav bars:

You touch me with words, that ive only read in the Bible
Our love will go bridle, with-out you, im known as suicidle

Is to check my poems, letters, and notes of forgive-ness
With-out you by my side baby, My time on earth is Sense-less...

We will meat soon, finally after this long time, in the same room
But im always there, consider me the sun and the moon

.. if 50 cent saw this and realised how badly it shits over 21 questions, he'd shoot himself nine times

you should show this to your girl, she'd love it

9.5/10