Yo, this rhyme was tight. It was deep and well thought up. I look forward to readin more. Keep writting....

one day your fine the next your dodging flaming nines//
just to bust back to realize it was ya man come to find//
i spit these lines in hope for mere redemtion//
but all i'll recieve is someones henchmen//
who keep sending messagies to reveal my ending//
but im not going out like that, not ready for death mendings//