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aiight
the hook
The first 2 lines were a good set up for a hook.
Though in stead of house to house, you could of put heart or someht ing else.
hoo 6/10

1st verse
Our lips went from across the school yard, to close inches
great line
ok it was an aiight verse some nice immagery and some aiight vocab and wordplay.

Highest on my scale of ricter, we were stuck like stickers
this was one of the weaker lines in the song, but it was a good concept

overall verse 7.5/10

2cnd verse
You touch me with words, that ive only read in the Bible
Our love will go bridle, with-out you, im known as suicidle
probably your worst line[/b]
again it was a nice verse, with some good wordplay, nice immagery, but it could of been made better.
[i]overall 7/10

3rd verse
your best verse too many quoteables in this one.
the best wordplay, immangery was in this verse.
overall 9/10

i wasnt being harsh i was only commenting mainly on the bad things so it can help you elevate. it was a good drop, and you have some talent, but it seems that if you would of took your time, (i do this) and not rushed it instead.

[b]overall[b/]8/10

aiight
keep it up

peace