Thread: ~new verse~
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Old 12-07-03, 04:20 PM   #2
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but this was ok...your structure could use some work though, some of your lines were a little stretched out there, you should try to make them a bit shorter and keep all your lines around the same length though...your flow was alright, could be touched up...add some multies to this....overall this was ok...keep at it.
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