Veteran
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IP:
Dude...
That's a little whack...
Your rhyme scheme needs work.
You need to shorten ya lines some...
But, ya hit this cat fairly hard, which I guess ya meant ta do.
Pretty primative were ya punches, but they were there.
The therapy part was pretty funny.
Decent, but needs alot of work.
Peace
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