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Old 12-09-03, 04:18 AM   #19
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From: E-Dub
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damn close battle in some ways....but Avalon had some lines that i've seen before..no hate to ya duke....but some of ur lines were kinda old...for example

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From Avalon:
The truth is a fat woman... wearin Nike Spandex this time,
n' even that means... the truth is he's stretchin the lines
the hottest thing I ever thought... were lines to wow the reader
The hottest thing u ever thought of was getting caught w/ a fever
^^ur entire opener had played punches...(spandex and fever)

honestly...i think Amend got this with harder punches and better creativity and wordplay....here's the line that killed it

Quote:
From AMEND:
Mend'll Script'cha Pain
Probably End Up Like Cam. - Dryed Up Under 28 Different Names
^^lol...that was actually funny...

BREAKDOWN
Punches - Amend (hit harder)
Flow - Avalon
Complexity - Amend
Personals - Tie
Creativity - Amend
RhymeScheme - Amend
Vocab - Tie
Structure - Avalon
Wordplay - Amend (more updated wordplay)
Overall - in my honest opinion Amend got this like i said just with much harder punches and a more original/creative verse....good read from u both though...no hate..just a vote..

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